jacqueline

//Charcters: Ophelia Macrachiel (The more stuck up one.) NO I AM NOT STUCK-UP! (Yeah...you kinda are) & Colten Todd (Mysterious. We don't know that much about him.) SURE WE DO! Capri Tom (Sort of just cruising with her friends.) NAME-STEALER! & Chris Fox (One word: Soccer.) April Jansen (THe sweetheart. Always worried if someone is upset.) & Matt Callahan (The football/hockey jock.)

Tentative story line: Chapter one: phone call. Introduce the girls and their background and history together.

Chapter two: scene at school. Introduce the guys and their background and history together. Also the connection with the girls.

Chepter three: wild party. Dancing, music, beer. Kids get drunk, try to drive home. Get in a car accident. Someone ends up in the hostpital, one might get killed.

Chapter four: ending with either person recovering or funeral.//

I like this. Will each girls personalities contribute to the story...peer pressure? -amanda

//Answer: Oh most definitely. All the different angles of their personalities come together and really make something great.// Characters: Alice - works at engineering center. very loyal but is secretly being watched by government (for her 'flashes of the past') Kert - co-worker of Alice and is a anarchist though evryone thinks he's pro-gov. Sam- Alice's dead brother. Died in a falling accident but gov. actually killed him. Council - government

Background info: Everyone wheres masks that are plastered to their faces and they all think that the rubber is their skin. There are also NO mirrors so no one knows what they look like. Also the government is CRAZY for example, no one knows that hot water exists because the Gov.. has never given it to them. Still lots of people are loyal.

Plot: 1) Alice and Kert goes to work and finishes the "mirror" by accident 2) Alice sees her face for the first time (with mask still on, she still thinks it's really her face) 3)Kert tries to help Alice create her own emotion 4)Council calls Alice and "asks" her to destroy mirror (with many threats) 5)Alice finally takes mask of and you are left in suspence

I am a little overwhelmed with how I am going to get through that the government doesn't let you think for yourself because all people are exposed to is what they government says there is. I also am not sure where I will have all of the flash backs (that's where I thought a lot of the secrets about the gov. will be hinted.)

What do you think?

//Wow! I LOVE this! It is so complex and interesting. Very cool plot line because it is definitely original. I think this story is probably going to get complicated and maybe a little hard to write. But I'm sure you can pull it off and it will come out great. Just one question:

What made you want to leave the reader in suspense? It's a great ending, very clever but is there something that inspired you to do that?

<3, Jacquie//

Well. I thought that the story would be too long if i really fin. da story. so i thought i wouldn't finish it but still have a good plot and just leave some suspense

By the way, I don't know I properly introduced myself. My name is Amanda and I am on the select soccer team called Metro Strikers. I have been to Hawaii once and absolutly loved it! And, I am terrified of sharks/.....any type of fish. (I don't know why but I just HATE them!)

//I get it. and I love it! I think it is a perfect ending.

I sent you an e-mail but I don't know if it went through or not. I'm Jacquie and I dance with my school program. I have never been to St. Louis but i'd like to go and see the arches. it must be nice having a national figure in your hometown. ha ha. :)

I haven't got your email but I posted my story on my wiki page-thing. sometimes my email gets messed up if you try again it might work. The arch isn't that great...if you were wondering.//

I suggest you fix some minor typos... throughout the entire story, and somehow link this page to your rough draft? ~Guess who! (STOP TYPING HERE!)