matthew

Okay, I guess I should put in a little something about myself up here. I am 13 years old and you can Skype me at matthewalm.

I think that's all I need to put in here. I prefer to use chat, because my microphone is really bad.

Well, here is everything I have. I am done editing the storyboard, and all I'm going to work on now is the story itself. [|Storyboard.pdf]

Here is the collaborative draft that 3 of us are working on (1 overall story, 3 perspectives) [|Story.pdf]

[|Here] is the final draft. I hope it is good enough (though I doubt it...)

-What areas of the story need the most improvement? -Does the story flow clearly and logically? -Do any word choices need changing? - Are my descriptions complete and detailed?

Comments: -Just wondering, where does your main character fit in from scene 1-3, who is todd? Is Todd, Olivia?- //Now the name is Sela, but it is mentioned in my [|updated]// //story.//

-Do you have any descriptions of their past, what happened to the father?

-Besides that same thing the others wrote

//I am thinking of leaving the father's description to the others. This concentrates solely on the mother and her oldest child.//