Willie's+zero+draft

My brother was my hero. I trailed him everywhere, no matter what. Even when he had chicken pox I followed him around the house and got chicken pox myself as a result. Imagine a train, an engine plus the caboose, that was us. During Halloween, I insisted on being Winnie the Pooh just like him. No matter how hard he tried to get away, I shadowed him yelling "POOOH, POOH" so loud my mom rushed me to the bathroom. He said that overbites are cool, and so I always thought I had a stupid mouth. By the way he has a massive overbite. You could fit the Grand Canyon plus Antarctica in the gap between his teeth.

He was also better than me in everything. I will write how we gradually grew apart, he made new friends and I was excluded. My brother was also friends with all of my childhood friends so it felt like I had none of my own friends.

Questions Do you kind of understand how my relationship with my brother was? Do I need more examples of me annoying him? What other kinds of things will I need to elaborate on our relationship? Is this a good opening paragraph?